Critique my SoP? Thanks!

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cosmosis
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Critique my SoP? Thanks!

Post by cosmosis » Sun Dec 04, 2016 10:16 pm

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AlexisPrel
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Re: Critique my SoP? Thanks!

Post by AlexisPrel » Mon Dec 05, 2016 8:43 am

Hi,

I think this isn't bad at all. I would insist more on what tasks you performed exactly during your experiences.
Your letter shows that you are interest in the field, but you could do more to show that the skills you acquired are adapted to your research goals. 

cosmosis
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Re: Critique my SoP? Thanks!

Post by cosmosis » Mon Dec 05, 2016 5:50 pm

AlexisPrel wrote:Hi,

I think this isn't bad at all. I would insist more on what tasks you performed exactly during your experiences.
Your letter shows that you are interest in the field, but you could do more to show that the skills you acquired are adapted to your research goals. 
Hi Alexis. Thank you for your response! I have updated my SoP and mentioned some technical skills I have gained through these projects.

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Re: Critique my SoP? Thanks!

Post by metapuff » Mon Dec 05, 2016 7:27 pm

Very good! Just a minor thing: when you wrote `` will continue this project as my senior thesis under Dr. Fox and Professor Eric Blackman, University of Rochester, in spring 2016'', did you mean spring 2017?

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Re: Critique my SoP? Thanks!

Post by cosmosis » Mon Dec 05, 2016 10:47 pm

metapuff wrote:Very good! Just a minor thing: when you wrote `` will continue this project as my senior thesis under Dr. Fox and Professor Eric Blackman, University of Rochester, in spring 2016'', did you mean spring 2017?
Thanks for pointing it out! Unfortunately I have already submitted two applications and with that typo :( . I hope that it doesn't affect my application negatively. Fixed it for the other applications.



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